Read through your theses and outlines from last week, and note the comments you received. Adjust the thesis and body points, as needed.
Read through these sample rough drafts:
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Choose one thesis and supporting body points to develop into a rough draft.
Note the samples\’ strengths and weaknesses, and do review their forms to compare them to the information and examples in the Expository Essay file. Consider any of these rough draft ideas to adapt to your rough draft.
Review all of the student papers in files from the fiction section. While short, they are great skeletal models for your rough draft. Note that each uses:
A focused, analytical thesis that examines character, or setting, or style, or tone, or symbols, or irony, or a combination of these and other fiction techniques, as shown in the text.
A third-person, analytical voice. This isn\’t an opinion paper, so no first-person voice is used.
Present tense: when discussing the story itself, as if the events are taking place. The informed reader \”enters\” the story and its events, and we discuss the details as is the convention when discussing literature, and the fine arts. For example, we might write, \”Mathilde is not satisfied with her life, and she daydreams of \’the pink meat of a trout, or the delicate wing of a quail\’ for dinner rather than \’good old boiled beef\’.\”
Use past tense only when referring to events before the setting of the story (as in flashback, and as used in the story itself), OR when referring to historical or biographical details. For example, you might write, \”Mrs. Mallard seems to represent many women in the 19th century South which did not allow women to own property, vote, or live alone without social disdain or at least raised eyebrows.\”
Quotations and/or paraphrases to support each body point. Try to use at least one for each body point, as shown in the text examples.
MLA format for all citations, including a Work Cited page (see student sample papers in the text). If you use only the story, cite just \”Work,\” singular. If you use another source as well for, say, a \”hook\” for the introduction and you quote or paraphrase there (don\’t use dot coms:), you\’ll have a \”Works Cited\” page, including the short story information as well as any additional sources. Remember that you do not use any outside criticism/discussion of the story itself for this fiction analysis: the story is your \”source\” to back up the thesis and its supporting body points.
Standard grammar and sentence structure, and variety in sentence style, for engaging reading. Review sentence types and sentence variety, as needed, from a previous composition source, or use the Purdue OWL site.
I made this outline, hope this helps
Everyday Use Outline by alice walker
Introduction: background/ setting.
Introduce Mama: her education level, ethnicity, personality, goals.
Introduce Maggie: her education level, ethnicity, personality, goals.
Introduce Dee: her education level, ethnicity, personality, goals.
Thesis: Everyday Use discuss the importance of the culture and how culture tells the history of a family. Culture can keep families together and it also can tell people about their history and where their family came from.
Talk about Mamas relationship with her daughters and how she controls her daughter.
How did Mama react to Dee when she changed her name and religion.?
How did Mama react to Dee when she decided to take the quilts.?
Talk about Maggies relationship with her mother and sister.
What happened to Maggie when the house burned down?
What was Maggies reaction when she found out that her sister came back?
How did Maggie react to her sister taking the quilts that Mama promised her?
Talk about Dee and her relationship with Mama, Maggie and Hakim the barber;
How did Dee talk to her mother and her sister about changing her name and her religion.
How did Dee introduce Hakim to her family.
How did Dee ask Mama about the quilts and what was Mamas reaction.
Conclusion: Mama and Maggie decided to stay with their old African- American culture while Dee have changed a lot and decided to change to the new African- American culture. Keeping the old culture is what keeps and holds the families together. Culture is history of the family and where did the family come from.